Elemental Saga: The Awakening for Android
I really wanted to like this game. I'm a huge fan of the choose your own adventure genre of games, and the idea behind this game was very interesting. I just can't reconcile the extremely poor writing with my wanting to like it. Sentences are almost always fragmented and it's clear there was little to no editing done with clear mistakes present throughout. I can not emphasize how much I wanted to push through and enjoy this game, but it became to much and I have to rate it as a 2.
The story is cool, but there are way too many grammatical errors to make this an enjoyable read. Sentences do not flow well, which breaks up an otherwise great plot. The cliffhanger at the end was unexpected though, which makes me interested in the sequel! At some points, the game feels a little linear in that the same outcome plays out no matter what you choose, which takes a bit of the fun away. Nonetheless, I did enjoy this story - but beta writers and spellchecks would have made the experience a much better one.
Did a British man create this? There are also some grammer errors and it seems as if he is British from the style of how the words are Layed out. Also it says at one part I brush of my dress even though I'm a guy... Also it was super disappointing when I figured out you don't get to choose your element your just a healing idiot the whole time.
It has an interesting story... But its hard to read that story with so many grammatical issues. Wrong words... Misspelled words.... Incorrect sentence structure. Very distracting. The stats seems to have no effect on the game and some stats dont even seem to be usable. Very limited on choices and most of them you can make dont really affect the story.
I love the game so far but their are a lot of typos and it is some times hard to read. I love the story but i would like their to be more choices. I love the idea of the story i love the idea and that is overall a 4 out of 5 for me please take some of the critisism and fix it so i can give this a 5 and recommend this game to a friend by truthfully saying this is the best game ever thank you i hope you comment back.
Not only do you don't have to payfor the full version, but this is a long lasting visual novel. The only problem I have is that you dont getto make rnough choices beaides that I love this game. Please hurry up and make the next one!
It is a great story, but you really don't get to make many decisions in the end. Most of the book you pass clicking next, but it has a great storyline. The stats in the corner are not even needed as it doesn't matter much in the end. The Grammar is horrible. Although the author seems to not speak English as his native language he did his best, and he is great. All in all a 3 1/2 stars. Wait the next book :)
As others have said the story's concept isn't bad but the actual wiring is rather poor. There are numerous typos, the dialogue is sub par, the choices are few and not very satisfying. I couldn't even bring myself to finish the story. I won't say it wasn't a good attempt just that it needs to be fleshed out and polished up a little more.
1st: it needs a loooot of editing. 2nd: focuses on the protagonist's OPness which is not a bad thing, but at the expense of the social interractions with your friends and allies is a bad thing, meaning we need more options. 3rd: its not a cyoa game since choices basically do little to nothing. My advice: spend more work on it and it wont be bad as it is for it does have potential, but it is released too early. Optional payment or not ,other free novels are way better as it is right now.
It's quite the struggle to read. The grammar is awful and makes it very difficult to follow along and enjoy. I suggest having someone review this work. Other than that, no complaints.
I find the story line really compelling. Sad to see it enough like it did as I really want to save my family. Only reason I dropped a star is because there is way too many grammatical errors to comment on. It actually slowed my reading down which almost turned me off to this entirely..
The idea is good and could be fun. But the number of grammatical mistakes are a huge turnoff. They really need to go through the whole thing and run a spell check. With the whole game being text based, this many errors is unacceptable.
Love the story. When I selected to be a female only a few pronunciations were changed and was called a boy multiple times there are of alot of misspelled words and typoes. But other wise I love the game. I played it twice and the out comes were surprisingly twisted
I enjoyed the story, it's fun to play. The spelling mistakes made the game hard to play since i had no idea what i was reading sometimes. Aaand it's FREE. Also, Is there a way to save Brandon?
I adore the idea behind the game. I'm a fan of games of this genre, in which you choose your own path, but the grammar was atrocious and genuinely pitiful. Had the writing been better, I definitely would have given this an overall of give stars as the concept was delightful.
I love the game. It's a great game, I love the story of it. The only problems I had with it is, the story moved to fast for my liking. I felt like I couldn't further my relationships at all. Also there was not enough choices for the story. I would have loved it if I was able to make more of my own choices.
It was amazing story but sooooo many spelling and grammar mistakes. The sentences were alil confusing at times. I really hope there is a part 2. I also wish the romance had some more options and you could actually do something with trying to get a relationship with someone.
The grammer, yes, is one of the things that really holds this game back from the potential it has. something that also needs to be improved is the speaker and their inconsistent gender change. why have the player be able to choose a gender if you're just gonna have the pronouns change mid story? overall, the game is trying, has a decent story (though sometimes its really rushed) and for that it's at least worth a read.
I like the idea of the story. Plot was okay. The grammar was problematic so were the misspelled words and forgetting to end some sentences with a period. There were alot of problems with this. I read on just to know what happened next. I wouldn't mind reading the next part of the saga at all if it was proofread.
I liked the over all story and the different ways it can play out... but even if I put myself as male at the start the story still play out as if I'm a girl. With the skirt and the dress. I find it funny.
I love the concept, however I started getting a headache at the terrible writing. Last straw was when other characters kept referring to me as male (him, he, etc) even though I chose female. Too bad.
Your grammar is poor. I saw a review of the game saying the exact same thing I'm going to say. The grammar is poor and looks like no one even tried to fix it. And if someone did try to fix the errors I have to say that is pretty sad. I got to the 4th paragraph before I couldn't take it.
Title is misleading, as it is much about a college life, but is not a big deal. Answers don't always make the scenario you would think, but is alright. Overall ok
The Grammar in this story is very poor, even to the extent of being unable to read it. There is a good storyline, however, the company need to ensure that the text is looked through to check there are no mistakes.
I enjoyed the story for the most part, there are some rather obnoxious typos, but it's free so you get what you pay for. My only real complaint is the ending. It felt like it could have kept going, but the writers ran out of time and cut it short. Other than that the story was fun and exciting. It's a good way to pass time.
OK but needs a lot of work. I just started it and I found a let of grammar mistakes. I also chosen to be a boy in the story but at the getting a dorm room through me off. I'm a guy and I'm to be sharing a dorm room with a girl. Other people that play as a guy spotted other things like this. If the story was on a forum and the main character is a girl then but give a gender choice, and it u give that choice than make paths for the choices we make. Like I said I chose to be a guy then don't give the speed up step. Characters need some work to and why do we not get to choose our element in the being.
As other reviewers stated, it's not a bad game. I quite like the idea and the story is nice. However, the pacing is off, the characters much like cardboard cutouts, and the story somewhat predictable and unimmersive. I always find myself wanting to do everything but what the game wants me to do. Also poor wording, grammar, and lots of typos. And some characters still refer to me as a "he" even though I chose to be a girl? Come on. And characters are ok but also mehh... I can't keep up with the story either.
I get that pleading is a little immature but I freaking love the game. Like love this game. While I am excited for the next one. I beg of you take the time to fix this one the spelling errors and lack of a good once over is hurting me deeply. That being said I love the story. Good job outside of the unprofessional errors. Keep making good games just remember spell check eh?
Too many grammatical errors, spelling errors and sentence structure is bad. Did you stay up late to write this? Because this is by far the worse I have seen by Hosted Games...
It is a very cool story that deserves to become a movie and the whole idea of choosing your story is great ...i would give it 5 stars but there is a spelling mistake or a sentence which is not grammatically correct almost on every page. But if you look past that , the storyline is great and it really does deserve to become a book or a movie ☺
I read this story before in the forum. I thought there will be more than before but the content was the same. I really loved romance so i was kind of dissappointed with less interaction between romantic options. There weren't many choices that we could choose. I really love the story's concept so i couldn't wait for the sequel. Good luck with your writing!
In terms of story and overall experience, it's pretty good so far. There are however a few mistakes and possibly some more that probably should be adressed sooner or later. For one there's a line jessy says that is likely intended to say "and who says chivalry is dead", may want to fix it. Also there's a few points in the story in which I'm apparently wearing a dress despite having chosen to be male. Other than these slight mistakes it's still definitely worth getting
The grammar is atrocious, and hugely distracting. Often times I can look past a misspelled word or two, but when an entire sentence's structure is jumbled up, it only makes me look harder for errors
The horrible grammatical issues and irregualr pacing is NOT someonething you can easily overlook to play this game. Its jarring and will break any sliver of immersion you have. The characters were introduced as no more than cardboard cut outs quite honestly. The romance didnt feel worth it at all. Dont recommend.
As others have said the story's concept isn't bad but the actual wiring is rather poor. There are numerous typos, the dialogue is sub par, the choices are few and not very satisfying. I couldn't even bring myself to finish the story. I won't say it wasn't a good attempt just that it needs to be fleshed out and polished up a little more.
Like many others have stated, the writing is garbage. The use of certain words like "forth" is rather annoying. It's one thing if you use it every now and then, it's another to use it in every paragraph. The grammer and punctuation are terrifying. I'm not over exagerating. I literally cringed multiple times and almost lost my mind when the writer actually spelled 'mic' (as in microphone), as 'mike' (as in Michael). All-in-all, the whole thing seems more like a rough draft, not a finished product.
It's quite the struggle to read. The grammar is awful and makes it very difficult to follow along and enjoy. I suggest having someone review this work. Other than that, no complaints.
I love the game. It's a great game, I love the story of it. The only problems I had with it is, the story moved to fast for my liking. I felt like I couldn't further my relationships at all. Also there was not enough choices for the story. I would have loved it if I was able to make more of my own choices.
First, thanks yet again for the free game, in this case the very very very long free game. However, as many have mentioned already, the English usage in the game is so abysmal as to suck almost all enjoyment out of it. More to the point, it's so bad that you frequently can't understand what the choices you are offered are supposed to mean. It's a shame, because with massive editing and only some tweeks to gameplay, this could be a very fun game. As it is, three stars are generous, but it's free.
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Loved it. Couldn't take my eyes off it. Grammar and words were off or spelled wrong here and there but the story made up for that. Didn't completely like how it ended. I did a whole entire other line because I wanted to figure out if the ending changed but it was just as heart wrenching, if not more because Suma was in danger, I liked Suma's character. It just drew me in. But yeah, all-in-all I think it was pretty great and I wish I could take the ending into my own hands.